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Do you want to make decisions about Jessica's interactions with other characters (besides David)?

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VReal

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Fapbert said:
I really like this game, am supporting. Jessica is very well written. full of life and very expressive, I immediately had a crush on her. But I don't know why the side story exists unless Dev is planning to merge the stories. It's an entirely different story. If there's no crossover you're just bloating the game. But some thoughts:
1. The English is atrocious. I point it out because someone else pointed it out and you were a dick about it. If you got some money coming in, pay an English speaker to look over your Google translated script.
2. I like the side story, just doesn't fit with the main story. Still confused why Dev did this.
3. Episode 12 is awful. Side story the kid in bed while friend fucks gf. The lighting is beyond shit. No clue who these people are or what they're doing until later when we can see shit.
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Apparently, you don't read the text very carefully, even though there is not much of it. And you also haven't read the FAQ (here, on Patreon and in the next versions of the novella), in which I answer repeated questions. However, I will briefly respond to your comments:

1. Yes. Sorry. There is no money for a translator yet.
2. The heroes of the two stories will intersect more and more as time goes on.
3. Hmm. There were already scenes in the dorm, and the transition to the scene of the second story is always accompanied by the "Meanwhile" cover. Well, the darkness is just night.))
Sorry if I disappointed you.

Anyway, thanks for the support and feedback.
 
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have i misunderstood something ? anyway i found the script a bit confusing. i mean if he is her brother (or another time it's her cousin) how can he suddenly be the nephew of her mom?
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VReal , here's some constructive feedback for why the game isn't doing so well:
  • The "Engrish": The english translation you use is... terrible. I know you don't have money to hire a translator, but you need to start searching for someone or anyone - with better language skills - to help you fix the dialogue in this game. This is the foundation of every AVN - graphics should be secondary.
  • The Graphics: Not a big deal, obviously, not the best - but they don't have to be. Maybe try "fixing" up the main girl (from some angles, her chin and cheekbones are just unnatural, but for the most part - they are more than serviceable.
  • With the exception of 2 total scenes where the 2nd MMC (the young man) and the FMC can be seen together or "interacting", there is a total disconnect between these two parallel stories: what you should've done, is have the secondary MMC become infatuated with the FMC following their encounter in the store, after which he vows to seduce the FMC as his first girlfriend and break his virgin curse. Would give a reason why we should care about him.
Honestly, fixing the dialogue should be your top priority. The rest will come.
 
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Filipis said:
VReal , here's some constructive feedback for why the game isn't doing so well:
  • The "Engrish": The english translation you use is... terrible. I know you don't have money to hire a translator, but you need to start searching for someone or anyone - with better language skills - to help you fix the dialogue in this game. This is the foundation of every AVN - graphics should be secondary.
  • The Graphics: Not a big deal, obviously, not the best - but they don't have to be. Maybe try "fixing" up the main girl (from some angles, her chin and cheekbones are just unnatural, but for the most part - they are more than serviceable.
  • With the exception of 2 total scenes where the 2nd MMC (the young man) and the FMC can be seen together or "interacting", there is a total disconnect between these two parallel stories: what you should've done, is have the secondary MMC become infatuated with the FMC following their encounter in the store, after which he vows to seduce the FMC as his first girlfriend and break his virgin curse. Would give a reason why we should care about him.
Honestly, fixing the dialogue should be your top priority. The rest will come.
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- Yes. Sorry. Again.
- To each his own. But ok.
- Especially to each his own. It's hard to please everyone.

Thanks.
 
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VReal said:
- Yes. Sorry. Again.
- To each his own. But ok.
- Especially to each his own. It's hard to please everyone.

Thanks.
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Hope u are a Dev who other suggestion.

Even if the exib scenet he game is too kinetic

if u want more patreon,u shoud add choice

I suggest u to add Choice in first game ,a game without choice are less fun.
  • Player should able to choose Ntr/Nts/Netori in 1st depending of our choice.

  • Fetish should be optional not forced

Some player don’t interact with some character,so things so be avoided.
For example I Bryan,I don’t want him to do anything with Jess

In swinging game u have always choice.

we love David and Jess story,we don’t care of mason and fabiana
 
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Eleanorduval said:
Hope u are a Dev who other suggestion.

Even if the exib scenet he game is too kinetic

if u want more patreon,u shoud add choice

I suggest u to add Choice in first game ,a game without choice are less fun.
  • Player should able to choose Ntr/Nts/Netori in 1st depending of our choice.

  • Fetish should be optional not forced

Some player don’t interact with some character,so things so be avoided.
For example I Bryan,I don’t want him to do anything with Jess

In swinging game u have always choice.

we love David and Jess story,we don’t care of mason and fabiana
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Thank you for your feedback and suggestion.

This is not the first time that people have expressed a wish to have a choice in the main story (David and Jessica). I explained that there is no choice, since the story from real life and adding a choice option was not logical.

However, I try to listen to the opinions of players. That's why I'm launching a poll.

If a clear majority votes for such an option, then from the next update (0.43) I will add a choice. Of course, its essence will be whether you will see this or that content or not.
 
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Sorry if it takes me a long time to answer, guys. Comments appear rarely and less than I would like.)
 
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VReal said:
I don't understand the question. Sorry.
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Hero means since you have 3 different versions on the patreon and the version here is 3 versions behind, he's asking for a hero to post a newer version here.
being 3 versions behind .35 .38 and .40 is very unheard of.
Also it's been 4 months since the last release here, people are going to forget the game even exists.
Patreon being 1 update ahead of here is normal 3 is crazy.
Anyway that's what "hero?" means
While you are working on .40+ the majority of your playerbase is playing .33 and any constructive critisism or any bugs they find will either have been fixed or so far back it's annoying to fix. There is no benefit to this at all.
The updates are also way too small. for 4 months wait between .30 and .33
 
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Do you want to make decisions about Jessica's interactions with other characters (besides David)?
it mean to u don't do something with bryan,it better to vote yes in poll?
 
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VReal said:
Sorry if it takes me a long time to answer, guys. Comments appear rarely and less than I would like.)
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0.33 is free but you have 0.4 behind paywall. can you at least share what is added between 0.33 to 0.4? I like Netori so I might buy but if it is just MC cuck stuff I'll wait.
 
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